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control.
gone.
just like so many
things before it.  
a list would take too long.
it's easier to say what isn't gone.
and of those, I imagine most are
temporal.
body rebelling for some unknown reason.
tense—
my whole body is tense.
my muscles shiver involuntarily.
just another thing I can't control—
great.
I relax, only to find, minutes later,
that my whole body is wound tighter
than a violin string
& I think I'm a couple pitches too tight—
about to break.
I hope no one gets hurt in the whiplash.
but that's just
one more thing I cannot
control.
:iconcalibius:
just like a control freak. i start and end with control.
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~blubbityblub Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Damn, that's powerful as hell. Well done, and congrats on your DLD! I got featured too which is how I got to your deviation :)
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:iconcalibius:
Thank you :) I had no idea people would like this piece so much! It was more for me than others.... lol.
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~blubbityblub Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
well keep writing stuff for yourself then, cuz this is awesome :D
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*Hfeather53 Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
& I think I'm a couple pitches too tight—
about to break.


i love this
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*bloodawni Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations on your DLD for this lovely piece. :)
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:icondailylitdeviations:
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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:icontravelgirlxx:
Control Freak. Yes. Just: yes. I like the changes you made from the beginning. The original was fabulous, but this is mmmazing.
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